Pickles

Mom says dadโ€™s got pickles for brains. You can smell the dill and vinegar on his breath, hear it sloshing around in his skull when he shakes his head. The affliction didnโ€™t seem to affect him much at first, but then we watched his mouth spin shut like the tinplate top of a vacuum-sealed mason jarโ€”right in front of us, it happened, and it freaked us out so bad we all took dinner to our rooms. Everyone says I take after my mom, but when I look in the mirror, itโ€™s his resemblance I see: a cool baby cucumber, plump with possibility. I think I get it, thoughโ€”the pickling. Some days the world seems no bigger than a mustard seed.  

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  1. Smitha V Avatar

    Wow! Loved the imagery and how you brought it together with the last lines.

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    1. elizabethburnam Avatar

      Thank you Smitha! ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ’œ

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  2. Niwlen Ster Avatar

    Definitely surreal and really cool!

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  3. LuAnne Holder Avatar

    I really enjoyed this poem. Like all good poetry it leaves much to the imagination. Good work little cucumber.

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  4. Sidra Elvey Avatar

    This reminds me a bit of Shel Silverstein’s poetry! I can imagine a great illustration of a pickle-headed man. The tone at the end is really cool–thanks for sharing!

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    1. elizabethburnam Avatar

      Thank you so much!!

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  5. Elizabeth Boquet Avatar

    That last line is pickle-perfect!

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  6. Gloria Avatar

    In the world of jars, I would love to seal in this poem and store it in my pantry for generations to come.

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    1. elizabethburnam Avatar

      Aww thank you Gloria!

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  7. Nina Lewis Avatar

    Brilliantly surreal! Congratulations on being the featured participant!

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  8. dawnfanshawe Avatar

    I love it – brilliant!

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  9. Sunra Rainz Avatar

    Wonderful!โ€‚Love the gentle humour in this ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. elizabethburnam Avatar

      Thank you so much! ๐Ÿ™‚

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